Kamis, 02 Oktober 2014

My classmate


We usually call her MOM,she is 42 years old but she is still young and energic.
she has husband and 3 children they are a boy and 2 girl.she is teacher in ABC Elementary school in Pandaan.She live in Pandaan,Pasuruan.

She is 160 cm tall,she has slim body and dark skin.She wear glasses.
She is smart but she little bit clumsy.She so motivated and so tough.

Even she is the oldest student in our class,but she know how to join us.
She is so friendly,she kind and knowladgeable person.
Over all she can be our friend,she can be our teacher.
And her name is RANI OKTAVINA L.

8 komentar:

  1. for the sentence "She live in Pandaan,Pasuruan." you should add "s" in word "live"

    and for the sentence "but she know how to join us" you should add "s" too in word "know"

    and for the sentence "she kind and knowladgeable person" you should add to be "is" before adjective "kind" and the word "knowladgeable" is a wrong spelling word, the correct is "knowledgeable"

    BalasHapus
  2. ok,thank you so much for your coment,,,,
    thats my mistakes

    BalasHapus
  3. Same thing with Mas Adam, you just need put some "s" in some words.
    For example : wear , girl... :)

    BalasHapus
  4. "a" husband
    "young and energic" put a noun after this sentence
    "wear" become "wears"
    "she is so friendly, she kind and knowlegdeable person" it can be changed to
    "she is friendly,kind and knowlegdeable person"
    sometimes put "comma" or "fullstop" to make reader understood the meaning of the sentences.at all, it is a good job...

    BalasHapus
  5. if yuo write after comma yuo must give space after comma..
    exs: She is so friendly,she kind and knowladgeable person. ...it's fals
    She is so friendly, she kind and knowladgeable person ...it's true

    BalasHapus
  6. I think,you are wrong write,knowladgeable = knowlegdeable.

    BalasHapus
  7. thank you for your corection guys...

    BalasHapus
  8. That is a good description. But, you must be careful to type your description. There is some mistake in typing..

    BalasHapus